Group 4-Brittany, Alex, Tahmina, Jaqwaysia, Patsy.
Thesis Statement- Many argue that this is a bad thing because everything is now advertised through the Internet, celebrities, and even the green movement.
Topic Sentence 1- The role of the Internet is commonly used for communication, information/data, and entertainment and now one of it's main roles has become to advertise.
Topic Sentence 2-Celebrities now advertise for creditability and more population for themselves.
Topic Sentence 3- The green movement has a huge, yet positive impact on the world.
Thesis Statement: Although, there are many strategies today marketers use the role of the internet, celebrity endorsement and the green movement to rack in millions of dollars by selling their products and manipulating the consumer.
Topics Sentences: 1) First of all, one way that advertiser promote their products is by using the social network. 2) Additionally, the second strategy that media is using to lure the costumers is by using celebrities to endorse their products. 3) Finally, the last way that advertiser get their way is by convincing costumers that they are helping the green movement.
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Thesis- Advertisements are used in our lives everyday.some of the most effective advertising strategies widely known are the internet,celebrity endorsements and the green movement. Topic Sentence 1- To begin with,the internet has not only become the modern way of socializing but it has become the base of media Topic sentence 2- As a result of wide spread media,celebrities are manipulating us into buying products we dont need Topic Sentence 3- Furthermore, advertisers are using the scare tactic to draw in consumers into supporting the green movement Shedell katherine jaimie ashley cynthia jeannette
It is not a secret that thanks to the seductive advertisement strategies used by marketers in this new century, such as Internet, Celebrity Endorsement and the Green Movement, it makes people flake when they see these advertisements, unable to fight back their most inhibit desires of buying.
First, considering the role of the internet; advertisement has really dwelled on the human race.
However, a celebrity endorsement seems to rake int he most money.
On the other hand, the green movement boarding our views but also cost our pockets.
Therefore, Advertisements change our lives, considering the role of the internet, celebrity endorsements, and the green movement.
Michael Yllanes, Rajah Taylor, Desille Rosado, Yerly Perdomo, Jose Torres
Dear Group 4-Brittany, Alex, Tahmina, Jaqwaysia, Patsy.
Try and strengthen your thesis statement. What is "this" that you are referring too? What is a bad thing? Your essay is about successful marketing strategies. It needs to mention that.
Thesis Statement- Many argue that this is a bad thing because everything is now advertised through the Internet, celebrities, and even the green movement.
Topic Sentence 1- Solid topic sentence.
Topic Sentence 2-You wrote "Celebrities now advertise for creditability and more population for themselves." This needs to show how advertisers use celebrities to sell their products. I don't get that in your topic sentence.
Topic Sentence 3- You wrote "The green movement has a huge, yet positive impact on the world." We aren't talking about the world. The question asks you how advertisers use the green movement, not the world.
Jobuar Ventura Daniel versa Shalhesha Daring Evelyn Cantillo
Good thesis statement. My one suggestion is to take out any extra words that will make the sentence smoother.
You wrote: Thesis Statement: Although, there are many strategies today marketers use the role of the internet, celebrity endorsement and the green movement to rack in millions of dollars by selling their products and manipulating the consumer.
Topics Sentences: 1) First of all, one way that advertiser promote their products is by using the social network.
For the above topic sentence I would write "social networking sites".
2) Additionally, the second strategy that media is using to lure the costumers is by using celebrities to endorse their products. 3) Finally, the last way that advertiser get their way is by convincing costumers that they are helping the green movement.
The rest of your topic sentences are correct. Watch your spelling though.
Thesis: It is not a secret thanks to the seductive advertisement strategies used by marketers in this new century. Three strategies used in today's life by marketers in the role of the internet, celebrity endorsement and the green movement to rack in millions of dollars by selling their products and manipulating the consumer.
Thesis Statement- Many argue that this is a bad thing because everything is now advertised through the Internet, celebrities, and even the green movement.
Topic Sentence 1- To begin with, the first strategy used in today's life by marketers in the role of the internet is that advertisers promote their products by using the social networking sites.
Topic Sentence 2- In addition, the second strategy that media are using to lure the costumers is by using celebrities to endorse their products.
Topic Sentence 3- Furthermore, the last strategy used in today's life by the advertisers get their way by convincing costumers by helping the green movement.
It is pretty nice to directly collaborate here in the internet. It saves a lot of paper and it comes very handy especially these days where android and apple apps has become a part of our lives.
Group 4-Brittany, Alex, Tahmina, Jaqwaysia, Patsy.
ReplyDeleteThesis Statement- Many argue that this is a bad thing because everything is now advertised through the Internet, celebrities, and even the green movement.
Topic Sentence 1- The role of the Internet is commonly used for communication, information/data, and entertainment and now one of it's main roles has become to advertise.
Topic Sentence 2-Celebrities now advertise for creditability and more population for themselves.
Topic Sentence 3- The green movement has a huge, yet positive impact on the world.
Thesis Statement: Although, there are many strategies today marketers use the role of the internet, celebrity endorsement and the green movement to rack in millions of dollars by selling their products and manipulating the consumer.
ReplyDeleteTopics Sentences:
1) First of all, one way that advertiser promote their products is by using the social network.
2) Additionally, the second strategy that media is using to lure the costumers is by using celebrities to endorse their products.
3) Finally, the last way that advertiser get their way is by convincing costumers that they are helping the green movement.
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Daniel versa
Shalhesha Daring
Evelyn Cantillo
Thesis- Advertisements are used in our lives everyday.some of the most effective advertising strategies widely known are the internet,celebrity endorsements and the green movement.
ReplyDeleteTopic Sentence 1-
To begin with,the internet has not only become the modern way of socializing but it has become the base of media
Topic sentence 2-
As a result of wide spread media,celebrities are manipulating us into buying products we dont need
Topic Sentence 3-
Furthermore, advertisers are using the scare tactic to draw in consumers into supporting the green movement
Shedell
katherine
jaimie
ashley
cynthia
jeannette
It is not a secret that thanks to the seductive advertisement strategies used by marketers in this new century, such as Internet, Celebrity Endorsement and the Green Movement, it makes people flake when they see these advertisements, unable to fight back their most inhibit desires of buying.
ReplyDeleteFirst, considering the role of the internet; advertisement has really dwelled on the human race.
However, a celebrity endorsement seems to rake int he most money.
On the other hand, the green movement boarding our views but also cost our pockets.
Therefore, Advertisements change our lives, considering the role of the internet, celebrity endorsements, and the green movement.
Michael Yllanes, Rajah Taylor, Desille Rosado, Yerly Perdomo, Jose Torres
Dear Group 4-Brittany, Alex, Tahmina, Jaqwaysia, Patsy.
ReplyDeleteTry and strengthen your thesis statement. What is "this" that you are referring too? What is a bad thing? Your essay is about successful marketing strategies. It needs to mention that.
Thesis Statement- Many argue that this is a bad thing because everything is now advertised through the Internet, celebrities, and even the green movement.
Topic Sentence 1- Solid topic sentence.
Topic Sentence 2-You wrote "Celebrities now advertise for creditability and more population for themselves." This needs to show how advertisers use celebrities to sell their products. I don't get that in your topic sentence.
Topic Sentence 3- You wrote "The green movement has a huge, yet positive impact on the world." We aren't talking about the world. The question asks you how advertisers use the green movement, not the world.
Meredith Arabas
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ReplyDeleteDaniel versa
Shalhesha Daring
Evelyn Cantillo
Good thesis statement. My one suggestion is to take out any extra words that will make the sentence smoother.
You wrote: Thesis Statement: Although, there are many strategies today marketers use the role of the internet, celebrity endorsement and the green movement to rack in millions of dollars by selling their products and manipulating the consumer.
Topics Sentences:
1) First of all, one way that advertiser promote their products is by using the social network.
For the above topic sentence I would write "social networking sites".
2) Additionally, the second strategy that media is using to lure the costumers is by using celebrities to endorse their products.
3) Finally, the last way that advertiser get their way is by convincing costumers that they are helping the green movement.
The rest of your topic sentences are correct. Watch your spelling though.
Meredith Arabas
Thesis: It is not a secret thanks to the seductive advertisement strategies used by marketers in this new century. Three strategies used in today's life by marketers in the role of the internet, celebrity endorsement and the green movement to rack in millions of dollars by selling their products and manipulating the consumer.
ReplyDeleteThesis Statement- Many argue that this is a bad thing because everything is now advertised through the Internet, celebrities, and even the green movement.
Topic Sentence 1- To begin with, the first strategy used in today's life by marketers in the role of the internet is that advertisers promote their products by using the social networking sites.
Topic Sentence 2- In addition, the second strategy that media are using to lure the costumers is by using celebrities to endorse their products.
Topic Sentence 3- Furthermore, the last strategy used in today's life by the advertisers get their way by convincing costumers by helping the green movement.
-Alex-
Shadell's group,
ReplyDeleteYou need to show how marketers use each of those strategies to manipulate the consumer.
Meredith Arabas
Michael's Group. Great points and content. Proofread for minor sentence construction errors that prevent this form being an "A".
ReplyDeleteMeredith Arabas
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ReplyDeleteThesis: Three schemes advertisers use to manipulate their consumers are via the internet, celebrity endorsements, and green movement.
It is pretty nice to directly collaborate here in the internet. It saves a lot of paper and it comes very handy especially these days where android and apple apps has become a part of our lives.
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